Comments on: Dark Places pt. 1 http://joshebben.com/2008/07/30/dark-places-pt-1/ Another Wordpress Blog Wed, 07 Jan 2009 01:28:28 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.6.1 By: Josh http://joshebben.com/2008/07/30/dark-places-pt-1/#comment-161 Josh Thu, 31 Jul 2008 21:57:28 +0000 http://joshebben.com/?p=79#comment-161 Yeah, I'm pretty much horrible with active/passive voice, for one Yeah, I’m pretty much horrible with active/passive voice, for one

]]> By: jeremy http://joshebben.com/2008/07/30/dark-places-pt-1/#comment-160 jeremy Thu, 31 Jul 2008 21:43:46 +0000 http://joshebben.com/?p=79#comment-160 hi josh, i like all the attention to detail in this story -- the layout, history of the building and description of lighting, dampness builds atmosphere . i can picture you doing this sort of exploring. the gag (?) 1967 newspaper was a nice touch. a nod to fallout? there are some language choices i'd make differently, but otherwise i look forward to reading on. hi josh,

i like all the attention to detail in this story — the layout, history of the building and description of lighting, dampness builds atmosphere . i can picture you doing this sort of exploring. the gag (?) 1967 newspaper was a nice touch. a nod to fallout? there are some language choices i’d make differently, but otherwise i look forward to reading on.

]]> By: jeb http://joshebben.com/2008/07/30/dark-places-pt-1/#comment-159 jeb Wed, 30 Jul 2008 12:04:43 +0000 http://joshebben.com/?p=79#comment-159 More! More!

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